Wednesday, June 9, 2010

Up in Flames

Rauf is learning to add more detail to sentences to make them more interesting for an audience....let him know what you think about this one which describes a fire that started shortly after an earthquake.


Powerful flames were shooting thick glass from windows onto the streets while billowing clouds of black smoke darkened the bright sky.

1 comment:

  1. Dear Rauf,
    What a powerful and clear description you have created in one complex sentence. Well done I really look forward to reading more of your writng.

    Love from Mrs Jarman

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