Lily Learns To Swim

We had to write a story to go with a picture of children playing at a beach, and this is what Sean came up with. Pay close attention to the rich vocabulary he uses to describe things!!

On a hot, sunny day, kids were running like a flash into the water. The sand was soft like a puppy. Children were making beautiful sand castles with amazing, unbroken shells.

A girl named Lily was scared of the water. Her friend came along and asked, "Would you like me to teach you how to swim?" Lily replied, "Yes." Suddenly Lily knew how to swim and she was terrific at doing back-stroke!

Lily was like a marvelous mermaid zooming along the water Her parents were wowed that their daughter could swim. Lily and her parents thanked Lily's friend. She was no longer frightened of the water and she achieved her goal to swim.