Friday, May 20, 2011

Swept Up

Faith edited her writing with the teacher and worked really hard to include details which would make it more interesting for an audience.

I watched the news and saw that there was a tornado in Albany. Did you watch it?

During the terrible tornado which sounded like a rumbling, roaring, jet plane, things like trampolines, swing sets, and lawn furniture were swept up and tossed around. Cars with children inside were overturned and smashed.

3 comments:

  1. Wow, Faith. Your description of the tornado made me feel like I was watching it even though I didn't see the news about what happened in Albany. Keep writing! You are very good at it!
    Your friend from Wake Forest University, Ann Cunningham

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  2. Wow Faith! that was a very good description of the tornado in Albany. I liked the way you described the sound of the tornado. It was like the tornado was right in front of me!

    YOU ARE VERY GOOD AT WRITING KEEP IT UP FAITH!!!

    From your sister Thora...

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  3. I never ever seen a tornado.Have You?You could tell me more about it next time.You have used paragranhs on your writing that is great.
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