Smelling Beautiful

Rave is learning to add more detail to her sentences. She edited her writing with her teacher and here is what they came up with.


Remember to wash the bacteria and germs off your hands. If you don't, the germs will make you sick.

Squirt a bit of soap on your hands and rub them together until they are covered with bubbles. Remember to clean the backs of your hands and between your fingers. Dry them with a towel or a dryer.

Now that your hands are nice and beautiful smelling, you are able to eat because you don't have lots and lots of germs on your hands anymore.

Don't Forget

Ofa is learning to write an introduction and to add detail to her sentences. She had lots of great ideas and edited her work with her teacher....here is what they came up with.

It is important to wash your hands because you might get sick from the bacteria if you don't.

First you have to get some soap and water and scrub your hands. Don't forget to scrub between your fingers and around your wrists. Rinse off the soapy bubbles and dry with a towel.

I hope all the girls and boys will wash there hands so they do not get sick.

I Hope You Remember

Do you know why you need to wash your hands? People need to wash their hands so they can keep clean and stay healthy.

Make sure you wet your hands before putting soap on so that you can work up a good lather. Remember to scrub your palms, in between your fingers, and scrape under your finger nails. Don't forget to rinse completely until all the bubbles are gone. Dry your hands with a towel.

I hope that everyone remembers to wash their hands because I do not want anybody to get sick...because that might make me sick as well!

Don't Get Sick

Sione is working on a piece of writing about hand washing. He is learning to write complete sentences that make sense and have extra details. This is what he has so far.


After you go to the toilet, you have to wash your hands. If you don't wash your hands and you eat your lunch, you will get sick from the germs.

Hey You

Liku is learning to write an introduction paragraph. Check out his introduction for his written account of how to wash hands.

Hey you!! Don't forget to wash your hands after you use the bathroom. If you don't wash, the bacteria will make you sick.

Wash Properly

Christopher worked especially hard on his writing this week and then edited it with a buddy...here's what the two of them came up with.

It's important to wash your hands after using the toilet because your hands will be covered in harmful bacteria.

You have to put water on first and then soap. Scrub between your palms, the backs of your hands, and under your fingernails. Rinse your hands until all the soap bubbles and germs are gone.

If you wash properly, you won't get sick from toilet germs.

Swept Up

Faith edited her writing with the teacher and worked really hard to include details which would make it more interesting for an audience.

I watched the news and saw that there was a tornado in Albany. Did you watch it?

During the terrible tornado which sounded like a rumbling, roaring, jet plane, things like trampolines, swing sets, and lawn furniture were swept up and tossed around. Cars with children inside were overturned and smashed.

Terrible and Shocking

There was a shocking and terrible tornado up in North Shore!

Like all tornadoes, it started with a storm and a funnel cloud. Things like cars, trampolines, trees, roofs of houses, and garages were lifted up and overturned.

Luckily, it did not hit AUCKLAND!

Clean, Soft, and Smelling Good

Kane worked hard and had some great ideas about giving instructions for proper hand-washing. He worked with his teacher to edit....here's what they came up with.

Did you wash your hands before you had your lunch? It is so important to wash away bacteria and germs. Once your hands are wet, grab some soap and start scrubbing. Make sure there is no dirt, grease, or oil between your fingers or on the backs of your hands. Rinse under the tap and dry them with a clean towel.

When I wash this way, my hands feel clean and soft. They smell good too!

Handwashing Demo

This is Taniela and Quasia's first time filming their own video. Taniela was on the camera while Quasia was the lovely demonstrator!

Swept Up in the Swirling Winds

Karmana is learning to add details to his sentences to make them more interesting for his audience.


There was a terrible tornado in New Zealand which caused a lot of damage. I saw it on the news.

The tornado swept up trampolines, trees, cars, and roofs in it's powerful, swirling winds.

Local News

Auri is learning to make his sentences more interesting by changing the beginnings and adding more detail.

Did you hear about the powerful tornado that hit Auckland? If you didn't, watch the news and they will tell you all about it.

Devastating Tornado

There was a devastating tornado in Albany. The tornado was so huge and deadly that one person died and many others were injured.It was so powerful that it swept up cars and uprooted trees.

North Shore Tornado

Paula worked really hard to edit his paragraph with his teacher.

It was a horrible day in North Shore when the funnel cloud formed into a tornado. When the tail of the cloud touched the ground, the tornado started to move and left a path of destruction. I saw it on the news.

I hope it does not happen again.

Eating Chocolate

I was so excited that it was going to be the holidays! I went to Silvia Park mall with my mum and sister to get my Easter eggs. On Easter morning, I gobbled up my eggs and my Monopoly chocolates. They were so delicious that my taste buds felt they would burst with the intense flavour.

Playing Rugby in the Back Yard

What a fun day I had in the holidays. I played rugby with my brothers in the backyard. We enjoyed kicking the ball and tackling each other. We had a lot of fun!

Heavenly Chocolate Cake

In the hlidays it was so exciting to go to my Aunty's house. My cousin made a chocolate cake. I saw it inside the fridge and it was covered with chocolate chips and sliced bananas. It looked and smelled so delicious. As I took a massive bite, I felt like I was in heaven!

Easter Egg Hunt

Finally the school holidays were here! I got to do lots of fantastic things. I got to search for Easter eggs in the house, and can you believe it...there were some hidden in the bath tub! But the ones in the tub were wet and I just left them alone. My school holidays were the best!

Holiday Program

During the holidays my brother, sister, and I were so happy that we were able to go to the holiday program at the basketball hall in Tamaki! When I got inside, I started to play some games with my new friends. We all had a great time.