Friday, April 1, 2011

Rainy Day

Sione had written a paragraph about a rainy day, and his writing group worked with him to edit's what they came up with.

I was so excited when I saw that it was raining outside! I went to my mum to ask if I could go out to play. She said, "Yes my dear boy you may go out."


  1. Well done Sione! That is a tricky one with the comma and the quotation marks.


  2. Hi Room 12,
    That piece of writing was very detailed. You payed close attention to details the reader would like to know. It was a very tricky piece of writing to write but you guys worked together as a team and came up with a exellent post for your blog. Well done!


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